Friends, Romans, Countrymen... it's contest time! Read over the persuasive posts from last week and choose the argument that most persuades you with either emotional or logical appeals. In a well-developed paragraph of about 100 words, explain whose blog you thought was the most persuasive and why. Be specific about what arguments or appeals caused you to agree with the writer.
All blogs should be submitted by Monday night. After reading your responses, I will choose one person as "Most Persuasive" in the class. On test day (Friday), our class "Mark Antony" will be crowned with a victory wreath. Good luck to all!
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When I grow up, I want to save abused animals. Nicole's essay really caught my eye from the first sentence. People do not seem to comprehend that animals have minds too. Put yourself in their position. What if you have a child, would you want them being infected with these chemicals? Yes, some people may say "We do not even know if their harmful," while other people are debating back saying "But we do not know if they are harmless." How can you put an innocent animal's life in danger. Do you feel guilty when you are buying house cleaning products? Do you say to yourself, "I wonder how many animals they killed when trying to test the product out?" You do not want people harming you, your children, your family, nor your friends, but is it ok that because the animal being used in an experiment is not your family, they have the right to put their lives in danger? Is that really fair? Personally, I believe Nicole is the "Mark Antony," and I support her essay 100%.
-Holly M.
While reading through each of the blogs, I came across one comment that grabbed my attention. Sam's opinion on religion, that none of us should have to believe in a certain religion, even though we are supposed to according to ministers, priests, or even family members is correct. I, being a strong believer in evolution, completely agree with his idea of humans deriving from an earlier, presently extinct mammal. Although many others may disagree, proven facts are more important to me than one person (God) creating the entire world out of one of his ribs. If this is true, than why can't it be done today? That being said, Sam's comment convinced me to nominate him as our class's Mark Antony.
Melani H.
As a read through the comments on the previous blog I found that Nick was very persuasive in his argument against homework. He used many reasons to support his dispute against the amount of homework we receive. I think that I was mainly persuaded when he said that some weekends students do not see the light of day. I can completely relate with him. I also think that a lot of students have jobs with interfere with “homework time”. Some weekends I stay up until midnight Friday, go all day Saturday and finish up on Sunday at dinner time. It is truly ridiculous. Teens want to enjoy days off from school, not do more work. I believe Nick is the Mark Antony of Period 7.
Nothing apppeals to me in being persuaded than pure, unhindered logic. Kelsi's method of persuading us that security checks before boarding a plane uses just this. She states that those with nothing to hide have no reason to avoid security checks, and I whol-heartedly agree with her. Then there is her use of emotional appeal. None of us want to see another terrorist attack, and surely while traveling with youre family you want their safety to be completely and totally assured. Kelsi's writing is a pefect example of how "short and to the point" persuasive writing should be done, and I choose her as Period 7's Mark Antony.
-Scott C.
Melani’s mighty persuasion tactics were stupendous! They certainly stood out to me as I read through the contending posts. Her powerful introduction commanded 100% attention as she listed some of the most horrid chemicals around before mentioning that smokers willingly pour them into their bodies. She then tore down any possible arguments that smokers may use to defend their habit. Especially strong points (in doing so) were “Is it because society wants us to conform to its sick idea of being happy?” and “No one is shoving a cigarette in their mouth and lighting it up for them. It is the person’s choice to accept what is being offered.” Melani pulled the emotional strings by whipping out statistics pertaining to the number of people that die yearly from diseases caused by second-hand smoke (a terribly astounding figure). Two phrases that really tugged at the heart were “We all are aware of the harm cigarettes do to our bodies, but are we as aware of the damage that it does to those around us?” and “Did you know that children who live with someone who smokes are at a greater risk of developing colds, infections, and asthma?” The first of these phrases was instrumental in her argument because people are often more strongly affected when they find that they are harming someone else. People more deeply consider changing their ways when their actions are responsible for the welfare of others. The second phrase, referring to children, was a great emotional appeal for parents to read. It must tug at a parent’s heart to know that they are the cause of their beloved babies’ illnesses. Melani’s closing was also strong, as it wrapped up all of her points in a catchy format. Fantastic job, Melani! You are my choice for this class’s Mark Antony!
Arielle's essay caught my attention right from the start. Sexual abuse is a serious issue that many people tend to forget about or ignore. The victims, mostly being children, need to be heard and defended properly. Several statistics Arielle mentioned in her essay were scary, but excellently written. One, for example was "Statistics show that about three out of every ten girls and one out of ten boys are molested or sexually abused by the time they reach thirteen." That is an alarming number for girls and boys alike. An innocent child does not deserve to be treated with such abuse and terror. Another interesting statistic Arielle mentioned was "Studies involving New Jersey prisons show that ninety five percent of men convicted were abused in one way or another themselves." There was never a doubt in my mind that the convicted men were healthy mentally, but now I am reassured that the reason for their ridiculous actions is because of their own damaged pasts. Thankfully, I have never experienced sexual abuse, but the minds and bodies of children and other victims have been damaged for the rest of their lives. Is that fair? No it is not and Arielle persuades her readers expressing the depth of the problem through a child's eyes. I also fully agree with her last words, "The Constitution protects their rights, but who is protecting those of a defenseless child? This is a crime that needs to be stopped, and it needs to happen now." It is not fair that there are countless rights protected by the Constitution, but there is not one to spare for a child. Astounding job on your essay, Arielle! I nominate you as the Mark Antony of our class.
I completely agree with Nick's argument about teachers giving students so much homework. I also have been a victim of many homework cases, whether it comes to staying indoors and not having fun with my friends and family, or staying up so late because of the amount of homework given that day. How am I supposed to pay attention in my classes, and do the homework the teacher assigns that night, when I stayed up all of last night doing other homework. I, as an athlete that plays sports all year round, find it hard to make time for these pointless assignments which will do me nothing later on. Sometimes I think that teachers must think that all kids have super powers or something because the amount of homework they give. Another good point made by Nick is that many people put so much pressure on us. Teachers don't realize that not only do they give us children a lot of work, but so do our parents. How are we supposed to find time to do so much homework and then so many chores. Usually, for me, I do my homework and not do my chores because it takes me so long. Then, I get yelled at by my parents for not doing what I was told to do! I am sure if I did not do my homework and did the chores I would still get yelled at! Don't you teachers see how much pressure you are putting us under. Nick knows what he is talking about when it comes to too much homework. You might as well give the victory wreath to Nick without even reading the rest of the blogs.
To compose a persuasive argument, not only do you need strong opinions and details, but you also need proven facts and information. To give a persuasive speech that reaches full potential, it must possess information such as accurate numbers, studies, and researches. Nicole's persuasive post presented both opinion and fact. In her post she included accurate numbers of percentages as well as years regarding her topic. I also was interested by her topic. I have never been a supporter of animal testing at all. As Nicole said, it is terrible and wrong. Her arguement made me confident that there are other people in the world who care about animals to, as well as assuring me that one of those people is a good friend of mine.
Sam's theory of evolution really caught my eye. Does any one really know where this all began? We have scientists trying to do their studies, but will we ever know? I, too, am supposed to believe the whole Adam and Eve story because of my religion. Does it make me a sinner to want to know the scenerios that scientists come up with? If we're supposed to stick to our religion, why do some of us learn the theory of evolution in science class? What if its all lies? I am a strong believer in God, but no matter what religion you believe in, the story of the beginning of the Earth is always changing.
Brittany
While examining these blogs thoroughly, I discovered that the blog in which I share the most feelings with is Nicole’s about animal testing. One of my favorite family members is my dog, Madison. I shudder at the thought of her ever having been tested with animal products. People today think that because dogs and other animal can’t talk, that they are disposable. Well just because they don’t talk or communicate in the ways that we communicate doesn’t mean that they don’t communicate at all. In fact, all animals communicate in their own ways, whether it is a bark or a touch it’s still communication. And if they could talk I’m sure they’d have a lot of angry words to say. Animals do communicate, its just a matter of whether or not people choose to listen, and I love the point that Nicole made about that. I am 150% behind her. And the next time I go to use any household cleaning products, I am definitely going to think twice.
After reading all the blogs, one came across me really well. I completely agree with everything this writer had to say. Emily brought up a controversial point about how we, as students, are required to take a foreign language. Do you really think that all imigrants, just not the illegal ones, know English to a full capacity? It is true to my life. I may not be fluent in English, but I still have to learn Spanish. However, it is still mandatory that we learn a foreign language. She brought up a good point that we aren't going to remember every word or phrase we are currently learning in the foreign language of our choice. I actually dread going to Spanish class. Although it's really easy, it is so useless. Look at the career spectrums of current students; some want to be profession athletes, while others might want to be performers. Do you really think a foreign language is going to benefit them in any way. However, this is untrue to me. My current study choice is International Relations. That choice is going to benefit me because I want to have a business of some sort. Emily made me laugh when she made the comparision to her little brother. It may be funny, but it is so true. Let me stop rambling and let me get to the point. However foolish you may think of this topic to be, think about it. Immigrants are not required to learn English, and they aren't free. While citizens are free, and we need to learn their language. Now that is foolish. So, Emily should totally be the class's Mark Antony.
She began it with a hook and finalized it all with a clincher. She layed out the facts, which were definately a harsh reality. She also hit home in her closing. No doubt about it, Anna is the "Mark Antony of Period Seven". She argued a topic that was not only interesting, but relatable. Her critique on the media and "ideal look" was straight forward. By relating the topic in her closing to both girls and boys, I do believe she achieved her point and may have gotten across to some people who either feel this way, think this way, or critique this way. I know after reading her argument along with the facts, such as percentage of young girls who are "influenced" by the "ideal look", I will definately think twice next time I'm flipping through a magazine and wishing to look like one of those size negative 3 Barbie dolls.
-Arielle
Arielle’s emotional appeal was extremely eye opening and persuasive. The different statistics and fact she used in her essay were very scary, and I was completely unaware of how much that this terrible act actually occurs. It just goes to show how unaware we are of what goes on behind our backs and what society turns it back on because molest and rape are two horrible crimes that deserve far worse punishment then a couple of month in jail. In the essay Arielle uses very strong and convincing appeals on the issue. The statistics and facts are painfully eye opening, and show a very sad and scary truth. In my opinion Arielle is the Mark Antony of period 7 indefinitely.
dylan f.
Nicole's essay was beautifully written. It made me extremely happy to see that someone else shares their passion for animal wellfare like I do. People need to understand that no matter how big or small the animal, they all feel the same amount of pain we do. Some people say, "Well, the animals are bred for that purpose." That doesn't change the fact that they still feel pain. Nicole made a very good point when she said that people would react differently if people were being tested on in place of animals. People view themselves as they are above animals when that isn't entirely true. Just because we can't understand what they're saying doesn't mean that we are held higher than them. Another thing that I don't like is that people have no problem testing on other animals, but when it comes to their pets it's a whole different story. How would you feel if someone stole your dog and sold it to a laboratory to be stabbed and prodded with needles?
I'll stop now before I get too carried away, but i completely back Nicole up all the way. Giving a voice to the voiceless is incredibly heroic to me.
After reading through a couple of eye catching blogs I chose an issue very close to home. Diane’s topic on the driving age; I know only a few people younger then I in the class of 2011. I had just turned fifteen on September 2nd 2008, which means that I wont be driving without any restrictions my first year of college.
Of course we can understand the logic, but the state is not seeing both sides of the story, as Diane had pointed out in her blog, the more driving someone achieves the more experienced they will be. Instead they give us a permit at sixteen and a restricted license at seventeen.
Diane also brought up a strong point on how lowering the age gives teens more of a chance to practice driving with parents; who have been on the roads for a rather long time. I just enjoyed hers because I am pro-lowering the age because of how young I am compared to everyone else, good example: Most of my peers are getting there permit, but I don’t get mine until the beginning of Junior year.
Diane should totally win the class ‘Mark Antony’.
Emily F.
(Oh and Ms.Morrison; I accidently posted this on the other blog.)
After reviewing all the persuaive essays of period 7, I believe Sam should be crowned "The Mark Antony of Period 7". His essay was so moving and true! I find myself as well. In biology or in church, I always find myself asking, "What are we all doing here? How did this all come about?!" Sam really captured his readers' attention by comparing the religious aspect to the scientific theories. He incorporated his own feelings and confusions to the ones we all have ourselves. I too am supposed to believe that Adam and Eve was the start of all humans, but scientists have PROVED dinosaurs existed. Was there any proof Adam and Eve really existed? Am I a damned soul because my faith is being questioned? Sam, your a genius, a pure genius!
-Cassie K.
First and foremost I would like to thank all the people who spent their time reading and commenting on my entry. Thank you.
My nominee for the period 7 Mark Antony of the class is Danielle and her views on the death penalty. I also do believe that murderers and serial killers do not deserve their life any longer. I was very convinced by her point on people saying its not humane. Her opinion on the murderers not giving the people muscle relaxant before they killed them. The death penalty can be a painless process that should be used in our court system. She also stated that the fact of the murder can eat away at them, driving them into more pain then needed. That is why i nominate Danielle for our classes Mark Antony.
Abortions are murder. After reading Katie's persuasive essay, I truly agree with every bit of information she informs us with. She not only fills us in with her beliefs, but also fills us in with actual facts. She makes excellent points about how if you can't handle a baby then you shouldn't be having sex. Maturity only comes with age, you cannot get it overnight. People our age also don't think straight these days. Abortions are not the answer! It's killing an innocent child, and not even giving it a chance. I was swayed on this subject until after reading Katie's wonderfull written essay. She made me think about it more in depth, and now I can stand strong on her side!
Nick, by far, is my choice to be the Mark Antony of Period 7. His strong and persuasive opinion on high school student's homework quantity really caught my attention. I, and many other teens, can closely relate to the mounds of homework received in school. I also agree that teachers need to realize that they aren't the only teacher giving out homework that night. Homework is not a bad thing, but when the excessive amount takes more than hour, for each subject, to finish, that can be a problem.I believe that Nick used very strong details to describe his many views on limitless and useless work, which is a great quality in a great writer. I support this topic fully, and yes, i do believe that Nick should be the Mark Antony of Period 7.
Carina D.
Sam K. is not only the hands down Mark Antony of our 7th period English class, but he is also my personal hero. His thoughts of evolution and the lies within religious beliefs spoke to my soul and I agree 243% with him. His example of Adam and Eve was brilliant and mind-blowing. And If Eve really came from Adams rib cage, wouldn’t the human race be completely inbred? And the theory of evolution is not theory, it is fact. Sam should receive more than a wreath, he should be awarded a Nobel Prize for this fantastic work of art.
The blog that caught my eye the most out of all of our class was Melani’s. Her argument about the harmful effects of smoking cigarettes really moved me. I totally believe in her idea that cigarettes should be completely banned in America. The best thing about her blog was the intro, which 100% hooked me, and kept my eyes to the screen until the blog was over. The strongest idea of this blog that persuaded me was the fact that so many Americans know the harm cigarettes do to their bodies, yet they still choose to smoke them. Cigarettes have personally affected my life, because my grandma died of emphysema from smoking cigarettes, and even my father had a heart attack from smoking cigarettes. Luckily this event in my father’s life influenced him to quit smoking for good. Lastly, I truly am with Melani on this topic, and I believe that she used great points to persuade our class. Melani should definitely be crowned the Mark Antony of our Period 7 english class. Also, I hope her blog should help persuade the young “smokers” of our school, and those all over the world.
-Nick
All my life, I think about the day when I get my license. For all people, the highlight of their teen years is getting their driver's license. When forced to wait longer for this privilege, many get frustrated and infuriated. As Diane has mentioned, driving experience does not come from waiting. We need the time to learn the skills needed behind the wheel. What parent wants their child to go off to college when they have only driven for a few months? Think about how many people complain about the inexperience teenagers have when it comes to driving. Wouldn't lowering the driving age solve this accusation that people have?
After reading all the essays, Nicole’s was the most persuasive to me. I feel she should be crowned the "Mark Antony" of Ms. Morrison’s 7th period English class. I agreed with everything she said. It’s wrong to test chemicals that can be harmful on harmless, innocent animals. I now feel guilty thinking about the things I use on a daily bases that might of have brought harm to those animals. Animals are very similar to humans. They eat, sleep, breed like us. Maybe they should be treated with a little more respect.
-Maureen B.
My nomination for seventh period’s Mark Antony is Emily. I think we all can relate to the aggravation we feel when the illegal come over and force us to learn their language. I went to California about four years ago and was annoyed when business signs were in Spanish larger than in English. I have nothing against immigration but they should do come over legally like all of our ancestors did. Emily made an excellent point when she said that many kids in school do not know proper English and now must learn a new language. How can the school system expect kids that cannot speak their native language to learn a brand new language? We are taught English from the time of birth and still many do not speak or write it properly. When you live in the United States of America you should speak English. We are not the United States of Mexico or the United States of Spain. If you don not think that it is not that bad, I dare you to go to California for a few days and you will see how much it annoys you when people are speaking Spanish and everything is in Spanish. In some places you have to ask for an English menu or waiter. I was only twelve when I went to California and was not bothered by learning Spanish until I went to California. Emily also used excellent word choice and appealed to my emotions. I think Emily made excellent points and was very persuasive to me and my nineteen-year-old sister who is fluent in Spanish.
My body is my temple, a phrase that screamed at me when I read Anna's essay about body stereotypes in women. She's right, and she completely convinced me. The body is all about sexy appeal anymore, and Anna showed that! In fact, I think it applies to men and women. You know what I think is more attractive than a stereotype body? A body belonging to someone who likes their body.
-Alison
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